Overall, your prose should have movement, so to speak. It needs to undulate, race away, slow down, it needs rise and parry, it needs to be gentle, it needs to be exciting. It should never stay still; otherwise it would bore the reader. In other words, your prose should have the right balance of pace. If it doesn’t – either it reads too fast or too slow – correct it.
- You’ve eliminated ambiguity.
- You have the correct tenses throughout.
- You’ve cut out hanging participles.
- Your prose has clarity and simplicity.
- You have consistent characterisation throughout.
- Pacing should be balanced – not too fast and not to slow.