Avoid Top 5 Writing Mistakes - Make Your Writing Better
As another
writing year draws to a close, it’s worth looking at the basic errors all
writers make at some point, so that you ensure they don’t reoccur in your own
writing. Learning about the most common ones will help you avoid them in future
and thus make your writing better.
The ones
I’ve listed are very common mistakes that all writers have made during their
writing. There are, of course, dozens and dozens more well-known writing
mistakes – and certainly more complicated ones – but as an editor, the
following five are the most common that I encounter:
Lack of Planning
One of the
biggest mistakes to make is to not do any planning at all, especially if you’re
embarking on something as complicated as a novel. No rule exists that writers must plan,
but it’s a simple fact that even a small amount of planning – some characterisation,
plot points and perhaps some themes etc. – will result in a better story than
one thrown together without any real thought.
Editors know
when a writer hasn’t done any planning. The story is often incoherent, it
rambles, there’s little pace, there’s weak characterisation, no meaningful plot
points, it sags in the middle or the story stutters because the writer ran out
of ideas and often the plot is peppered with too many mistakes. To an editor it
stands out like the proverbial sore thumb. A well-structured novel has had some
kind of planning. Any writer that argues until they are blue in the face that
they’ve written a great story without any planning isn’t being entirely
truthful - it never works.
Even
established writers who call themselves ‘pantsters’ do actually plan to a
degree. They’d write some pretty crappy stories otherwise.
Incorrect Verb forms
This is
about knowing the difference between past, present and progressive tenses.
Most writers
use past tense, but by doing so they rely heavily on the progressive tense-
denoted by the use of the verb ‘to be’, and used in conjunction with the
present participle, the narrative becomes clogged with words ending with ‘ing’,
for example:
He sat at the table, drinking his
beer and dealing the cards to himself, thinking about what would happen in the
morning...
The
narrative relies too much on the ‘ing’ constructions (or gerund constructions),
which leaves the whole structure weak. Keep narrative strong by controlling the
use of progressive tense, for example:
He sat at the table, drank his beer
and dealt the cards to himself. He thought about what would happen in the
morning...
The example
shows a much stronger narrative which keeps to the past tense. There are
occasions when the progressive is needed, but writers need to learn to spot
where they are required, as opposed to when they’re not.
Use of Was
Without
doubt the single most reason for telling rather than showing. ‘Was’ renders the
narrative passive, but it also strangles any chance of being descriptive. Writers
– new authors especially – rely too much on this innocent looking little word.
Jenny was by the door when David approached. It was still raining, but that didn’t matter. He was home at last, after almost two years away.
She was smiling and almost crying, knowing that there was every chance he’d never make it
home...
There are
five instances of ‘was’. There are also several instances of unnecessary
gerunds. Without ‘was’, the narrative can breathe. It can show the reader, not tell
them, for instance:
Jenny stood by the door when David approached. It rained fine silver threads, but that didn’t matter. He had made it home at last, after almost
two years away.
She smiled; tears brimmed.
She knew that there remained a real, dreadful chance he’d never make
it home...
The example
no longer tells the reader. It shows more descriptive words. That’s because
it’s not being stifled by ‘was’ every few words. It’s more expressive and it’s
stronger by comparison. Not only have that, but the gerunds – ‘ing’ words –
have also vanished.
If you want
better, stronger writing, cut down on the use of ‘was’.
Hanging Participles
The
hanging particle is the most common cause of bad sentence structuring and
misplaced ambiguity. Editors don’t like them much, and for good reason. Writers
liberally pepper their writing with these horrible constructions, by mixing the
arrangement of words (participles should describe an action performed by the
subject of the sentence), to leave the participle hanging.
Pulling back the
curtains, she saw the sun.
She
either pulled back the curtains or she saw the sun. The participle at the
beginning of the sentence is hanging from the subject.
The
correct version would be: She pulled back the curtains and saw the sun. Here’s
another example of the participle incorrectly placed to leave it hanging:
Flicking on the kettle, she
opened the mail.
Again,
by arranging the words correctly within the sentence, the construction becomes
instantly better:
She
flicked on the kettle and opened the mail.
And
lastly, here’s an example that shows the ambiguous nature of hanging
participles:
Opening the car door, the hazy
light smiled.
The
ambiguity here is that light – smiling or otherwise – can’t open a door. These
constructions are the worst, yet writers don’t realise how bad the sentence
structures really are. The correct version is:
He opened the car door and that
the hazy light smiled.
If
you dangle your participles, you make the narrative look amateurish, it weakens
the structure and you’re in danger of creating ambiguity, the kind that will
have the reader sniggering.
But
famous writers use them...right? They do, unfortunately, and they ought to know
better. But that’s a reflection of poor editing as well as bad writing. Being a
famous writer does not make them immune to writing crap.
If
you want to make your writing better, don’t dangle your participles.
Wrong POV
First
person or third person?
Very
often, writers choose first person POV without understanding just how
complicated it can be, especially for a full length novel. They also choose it
because it’s popular with certain genres, but first person doesn’t suit all.
And it’s not until it’s too late that the writer realises they’ve made a
mistake. That’s because first person is so restrictive and complicated.
Third
person is the best POV to gain writing experience. It’s not restrictive, it
allows multiple viewpoints, more tension, atmosphere and emotion, but most of
all, the writer can exploit conflict in unprecedented ways.
If
new to writing, avoid first person until you’ve gained some experience.
Practically every writer thinks they understand it. But they truly don’t.
Once
you’ve gained some writing experience using third person, then practice with
first person. That way, tenses won’t prove as daunting.
So there are the most
common writing mistakes that editors will immediately spot. But there are some
others, such as run on sentences, bad dialogue, editing while writing, lack of
conflict or pace, hackneyed phrases and so on. But if you get these basic five right, you’ll
find your writing will become so much better and tighter, and the overall quality
will improve dramatically.
Thanks to everybody for stopping by throughout
the year to read some of the articles and hopefully become better writers.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to everyone.
AllWrite will return in the New Year.
Thank you for the post!
ReplyDeleteI faced the first person narrative issue when I wrote my first novel. I am an unpublished writer and right after chapter three, I was like "How did I end up using the first person?"
Needless to say, had to rewrite it using third person.
For some reason, show don't tell was too hard for me to understand! Until I wrote a crappy first draft and my friend was like "I hated your character."
I had to rewrite it and it was while the rewriting journey that I realized what show don't tell really meant!
Personal experiences are the best teachers, aren't they?